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This is a piece of micro fiction. Enjoy.

Downstream
by Dustin Driver

“Are you OK?” asks Olhado.

“Sure.”

His silhouette dances against the glare of the sun like a reflection in a funhouse mirror. The throbbing in my head is getting worse. I doubt I could stand if asked.

“You don’t look so good,” he replies.

“I’m fine, I’m just hot.”

The Wall - Chapter 1 of "WATER GOT NO ENEMY"

Hey, Oortistes! Here is the first chapter of the book that will eventually become "Water Got No Enemy." I actually got enough feedback on that story from here and others that told me I ought to expand it more. So here's chapter 1. Let me know your thoughts and of course detailed conscious critiques get the biggest cookie!

- Chang

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Water Got No Enemy

Hey, all. This is a story I've actually got out there making the rounds at various mags. Hope you like it. I prefer unsweetened, clear and definitive feedback. Stuff like "s'okay" or "I didn't like it" without further explanation don't help me grow as a writer. Neither does negativity. I look forward to your input and contributions - Chang