The continuing story of Tom Ford takes him on an interstellar voyage to a new planet that spells both hope and tragedy for him and the crew of the Starship Calypso.
By Adrian Kleinbergen
Tom Ford inspected his list of checkpoints and when he was satisfied that it was complete, turned the data screen off and flipped it back over his watch-face. He stood up, cleaning his round, steel-rimmed glasses with a soft cloth and put them back on, covering a slight yawn.
Schardt, Wernher A.
A gray Sony mini-cassette is tucked inside a smoky plastic case. A hand-written gum label is affixed to the case. Subject: Schardt, Wernher A. Beneath the cassette case, a stack of bond paper, slightly brown with age. The top and bottom margins appear to have been trimmed, so that the pages are 8 ½ by something less than 11. The type is bold and distinct, IBM Selectric.
So, I was reading Twenty Years Ago the Classics Were Different by James Wallace Harris, in which he says:
Twenty years ago I wrote an article about the classics of science fiction for the fanzine Lan’s Lantern – and later made the essay into a web site at the Classics of Science Fiction.... The final Classics of Science Fiction list wasn’t selected by me, but was assembled from the most frequently recommended books from 28 best-of lists and other sources dating back to the 1950s. Of the 193 books on the list, I’m not sure how many I would personally recommend today.
This version is essentially the final draft/complete version. Everything's there, although I'm not 100% happy with the tacked on ending. I think it needs to be there, but it's not 100% where I want it to be. Something about implementing new plot-points at the last second. Figures, right? At any rate, I've certainly learned a great deal about writing seriously through this iterative process. I've got a few more MoD ideas that I'm going to be working on as time passes, and I'll hit them with this same process.
As always, feedback is appreciated.
An extract from my story about time travel and planet-wide destruction. - Am I getting any better at being descriptive?
We join our heroes as they are about to witness a planet's demise from a ship 'parked' safe distance away.
Introduction: This is for the same anthology, surprisingly, somebody else on here posted a story for. The premise can be found here:
I still plan to flesh it out a bit more, but this is the basic story. I'm looking for any critique or comments that might help me with the story, especially on my characterization. I don't feel I'm giving my characters enough depth.
UPDATE: This now has two versions- one with comments, and one without. To skip to the comments, click here.
This is the official "First Draft", complete with all of the major plot points that I want in the story. I'm looking for feedback on the general structure of the story as a whole, the specific characters that we've got, and the actual implementation of the core plot points.
This is my contribution to the Singularity -vs- Science Fiction writing discussion here on Oort-Cloud.
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I've always been a fan of Hard Science Fiction myself (the kind of thing sometimes described as 'Science Fiction with bolts'). So I was happy to find HardSF.net, a web portal that focuses squarely on that subgenre:
Do historically weighted tragedies such as The Holocaust, the Columbine shootings, or September 11th (just to name the ones on the top of my head) impose any kind of moral or ethical imperative upon time travelers?
As writers, how do we deal with such events in a responsible manner without sacrificing our plots?
Should we bother, and if so, why?
v. 0.1 Initial draft release. A basic exposition of the core featureset of the story, released on Oort-Cloud only for early "alpha" phase feedback.
v. 0.2 Removed the "Syphilis" gag. Too slapstick and not dramatic enough. Replaced it with an allusion, relying on the reader's imagination to create the the most humiliating possible death.
v. 0.3 Expanded on the fiscal problems with the company. This will serve as foreshadowing for un-implemented plot points. Current word count ≈ 1,622.